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June 5th, 2002
06:53 am
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Heeding the call ...
Something is telling me to post this now. It's been in my poetry archive for years now, but something inside me is whispering that it needs to be said. Perhaps it will help one of you out ...?

Incidentally, I wrote this poem six years ago, to the week.

To One I Never Knew

Thank you, Love, for the times I've stared
at darkened walls, and seen your eyes.
For the times I've sobbed on tabletops,
and found your shoulder absorbed my cries.
Thank you, Love, for the times we've talked,
and my mind would tell me your replies;
For the lonely, dreamless nights we shared,
When the sheets sang me your lullabies.

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Date:June 5th, 2002 06:59 am (UTC)
That's just lovely, Bax. Thank you for sharing it. Very truthful.û
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Date:June 5th, 2002 07:32 am (UTC)


Thank you; it touches me quite deeply too.

I do wonder, though. (I'll open this question up to everyone. Speak up if you've got an opinion.) When I originally shared this in the poetry class I took in college, the general consensus seemed to be that the tone of the poem was sarcastic, or at least wounded. Nobody could believe me when I said that I was being quite serious and wholly sincere. ... So, what do you think? How did you read it?

And does it change your impression of the poem if I assert that it was written in full sincerity? Is it the implied emptiness that speaks to you, or the stated connection?

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Date:June 5th, 2002 07:57 am (UTC)

Re: question

The connection. :) Thank you for posting it.
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Date:June 5th, 2002 08:27 am (UTC)

Re: question

*boggle* Never occurred to me that it might be anything other than serious and sincere.
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Date:June 5th, 2002 09:41 am (UTC)

Re: question

I read it as sincere. I have a love of solitude, though, and I'm not cultivating cynical bitchiness like a lot of the people I knew in college.
Date:June 5th, 2002 07:49 am (UTC)
I love it. I can see how it speaks of loneliness but also I hear hope in it. It's really very lovely.
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Date:June 5th, 2002 02:59 pm (UTC)
Very well written and depicted...

And personally, I read it as being sincere from the start...
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