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February 3rd, 2006
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"He jumped the barricades and hurtled to the sea."

The policeman nodded, projecting patience. "Miss --"

"See?" she pointed. He glanced back at the pier. "He didn't come back up --"

He held up a hand. "A college-age kid? About my height, thin as a lightpost?"

"Well, yes ..." The usual double-take. "Oh, my. Officer. He wasn't one of those ... shifters, was he?"

"You must be visiting here. They call him the Pier 3 Dolphin Boy. He's made such a spectacle the pier's shopkeepers cracked down, but even the fences haven't stopped him."

"Oh." Nervous laugh. "Sorry to waste your time."

The officer shrugged. "If you see him again, let us know. At this point there are liability issues, trespassing ... Honestly, I’m kind of sorry we're going to have to stop him. I've seen the pictures -- he looks so happy in midair, his long blond hair streaming out behind him ..."

He smiled, but it didn't ease her sudden look.

"His hair was short. Definitely short. It looked brown."

"Are you sure?" he began, glancing -- catching pale in the pier's shadows -- swiveling his head.

"Shit." He ran to the beach, peeling his shirt.

Current Mood: accomplishedmuseiful
Current Music: Billy Idol, "Wasteland"
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From:baxil
Date:February 3rd, 2006 09:56 am (UTC)
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This is nominally set in The Tomorrowlands Universe.

The idea got stuck in my head this morning while I was listening to music on my way to work; I cherry-picked a lyric, took another line from the next song, and thought about how I would bring them together. It ended up darker than I thought it would be, given the thoughts song #1 typically provokes me to write.

Extra bonus Baxil Points if you know the song reference.
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From:soreth
Date:February 3rd, 2006 06:45 pm (UTC)
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"Those creatures jumped the barricades, and headed for the sea"

You have no idea how many days that snippet has spent revolving in my head. It always sounds so oddly and obviously right....

(Oh yeah, and R.E.M. - "Belong", but that's been posted already.)
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From:baxil
Date:February 4th, 2006 09:43 am (UTC)
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Yeah, I know the feeling. I've written a story cued off that song's lyrics and it still won't leave my head.
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From:cloakable
Date:February 3rd, 2006 10:05 am (UTC)
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Awr. Good writing, with some nice black humor in there.
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From:summer_jackel
Date:February 3rd, 2006 01:09 pm (UTC)
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oooooooh. That is abslutely beautiful.
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From:summer_jackel
Date:February 3rd, 2006 01:10 pm (UTC)
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absolutely. fie on being awake this early.
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From:dancinglights
Date:February 3rd, 2006 01:19 pm (UTC)
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REM - Belong?

I totally cheated, but noticed the bit that had a lyric'ed turn of phrase to it and went with that, so it's not *too* bad.
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From:dancinglights
Date:February 3rd, 2006 02:59 pm (UTC)
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By the way, I really like this piece. It stands very well by itself, even otuside of the tomorrowlands universe.
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From:baxil
Date:February 4th, 2006 09:32 am (UTC)
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That's the one! Congratulations. :) Double points for (apparently) using leet google-fu rather than knowing the song beforehand, like I was expecting half my readers to.
From:deirdremoon
Date:February 3rd, 2006 06:53 pm (UTC)
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Wild. I love it.
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From:delcan
Date:February 3rd, 2006 11:38 pm (UTC)
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Y'know, ever since the first time I heard "Belong", I KNEW it was about the Changes. Even if it never was intended to be, that's what it's about.

And *snurk*. I love the ending.
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From:baxil
Date:February 4th, 2006 09:42 am (UTC)
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Yeah ... there's at least one other story waiting to be told out of that song's lyrics: "The world collapsed on a Sunday morning. She got up from the kitchen table, folded the newspaper and silenced the radio ..." That one, unlike this, is definitely set in the early days, probably even the first day.

Of course, I'll have to change the day to Wednesday. Everything bad in TTU happens on a Wednesday. I'll be damned if I know how that got started, but it worked out that way, it stuck, and there's no messing with destiny.

And I couldn't figure out how to have creatures, multiple, do any barricade-jumping, but probably someday, somewhere in TTU there will be a stampede of the were-lemmings ...
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